(I've read your post in the main thread concerning your story).
I like the idea of the raincloud being the focal character. However, as Deathcon said, you want to be wary and cognizant of your reader/audience. The only line that made a clear reference to the raincloud protagonist was "As if the [rain] couldn't make up its mind." All other references feel like petty allusions. The dialogue between Tim and Paul also feels contrived and unnatural, most likely because of the difficulties of having a non-humanoid character. Thusly, the rain is undeveloped and does not really make a choice (although the rain cloud choosing to save the family seems too coincidental, it is a bit funny at its implausibility).
Deathcon7
The first thing I want to address is your syntax. I know it's a pain in the ass to redo your formatting because it wasn't maintained from the word processor, but please be sure to properly format your work. I don't want to sound like an ass, but the only reason I read this was because so few people responded to the prompt. I want to make sure you don't get overlooked in the future.
Something you want to make sure you do is clearly narrate what's happening. You want to enforce continuity, and encourage understanding. It seems like you ran through this too quickly and didn't take the time to gather your thoughts. I know I said that was the point, but maybe you took me too literally? Slow it down a bit, and actually work out those writing muscles.
And please, for the love of God, format. I don't mean to mention it twice but really it's that important. I say this with my tongue pressed firmly against my cheek, but please don't let that diminish the message.
Ef-X
Understood, never really had prior experience writing out of my own free will (not including class projects and stuff) so i'm a newb when it comes to this. I will take your advice and work on it for the next prompt, thank you for the criticism.